Most writers can see their story unfold in their head before they put it on paper. But, do we show that to our readers? Sensory detail can make the reader see what we saw as we wrote the story. We need to make them feel what we felt. When we do this, we plop them right into the story, as if they are living it. Sensory detail is so important in making that happen.
Below are some examples of adding sensory detail that helps our readers live the story.
No sensory detail: It was hot and smelly in the cafe.
Sensory detail added: An ancient overhead fan above my head pushed the oppressive heat down around me while my nose was pummeled with the pungent smell of unknown spices.
No sensory detail: We walked through the forest rapidly.
Sensory detail: Our feet plunged deep into the lush grass as we walked. Hundreds of birds called out their irritation at our presence. In the distance, a thunderous growl made us quicken our steps.
Which story would you rather read?
Hoping to add sensory detail so my readers will live the story, Gloria