Comments on: Say What? http://wordsmiths8.wordpress.com/2009/06/23/say-what/ Wed, 23 Dec 2009 00:02:53 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: Shirley Shibley http://wordsmiths8.wordpress.com/2009/06/23/say-what/#comment-917 Shirley Shibley Mon, 29 Jun 2009 00:16:45 +0000 http://wordsmiths8.wordpress.com/?p=1093#comment-917 Thanks, Gloria. I had also thought of saying "She talked on and on while (POV character) pictured himself hitting his first home run. Thanks, Gloria. I had also thought of saying “She talked on and on while (POV character) pictured himself hitting his first home run.

]]> By: gloriastockstill http://wordsmiths8.wordpress.com/2009/06/23/say-what/#comment-916 gloriastockstill Sun, 28 Jun 2009 10:51:18 +0000 http://wordsmiths8.wordpress.com/?p=1093#comment-916 Shirley, dialogue having the boy tell a friend the girl talks too much is good. Gloria Shirley, dialogue having the boy tell a friend the girl talks too much is good.

Gloria

]]> By: nancysanders http://wordsmiths8.wordpress.com/2009/06/23/say-what/#comment-912 nancysanders Wed, 24 Jun 2009 04:49:54 +0000 http://wordsmiths8.wordpress.com/?p=1093#comment-912 Interesting question, Shirley. I think that using dialogue is a great way of "showing" that one girl talks too much. Otherwise, if you as the author just steps in and narrates and says the girl talks too much, than that would be "telling." Interesting question, Shirley. I think that using dialogue is a great way of “showing” that one girl talks too much. Otherwise, if you as the author just steps in and narrates and says the girl talks too much, than that would be “telling.”

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